"Precious Faith" by Hannah K.
To have faith in God is a beautiful thing.
You know that He put you here for a reason.
He died on the cross for our sins.
Sometimes you may stumble with your belief.
Why is it giving you no relief?
You sit and wonder,"Is it true?"
Or is it even doing anything for you?
You are working for rewards in Heaven,
And even though you may not realize it,
He is blessing you through your life.
He is our friend.
As you grow in the faith of the Lord day by day;
You wonder,"Why do I disobey?"
You ask the mighty Creator to forgive for your sins.
You tell Him that you need His help through this battle of life you must win.
He gave you a life that He wants you to use,
And faith that you will never lose.
So never doubt your faith in God's own self,
And now give this gift unto someone else.
The part where you talked about wondering why it isn't doing anything for you... I think whenever we feel that way, it's only because we are forgetting our powerful Savior, and what He did for us. "Remember now your Creator in the days of your youth," (Ecclesiastes 12:1) If we do that, we'll never feel like our faith isn't doing anything for us. It's always doing something for us... because it's everything.
ReplyDeleteI was also going to suggest that you start writing in first person. Of course, you are your own person, and you can write how you want, but I feel like it would be more touching if it was written from the perspective of the person who went through the emotions. Rather than how it's sort of telling me I went through them, when I may not have. It almost sounds pushy, like "You did this, and you did that, and this is how you felt." If you try to imagine an unsaved person reading something like that, they might get annoyed. And you don't want that.
I also liked this line: "you need His help through this battle of life" It's so very true. We can't do a thing without His help. We are weak, and He is strong. So, yeah. That line put it simply and briefly.
This is very poetic. Don't worry too much about confining yourself to a rhyme pattern if it doesn't come out naturally. You'll just end up messing up your poem. ...Like with the "God's own self" thing. That's a little weird... It would be better if you just let it not rhyme.
You definitely have a talent, so keep using it!! I want you to write a lot!!!
I swear there was something else I wanted to say... Oh well. This is long enough.
Good poem. :) :)